Some people think that paying tax is their only duty, while others believe that we have more responsibilities towards society. Discuss both sides and give your opinion?
Some individuals think that paying
tax
is their only work, Fix the agreement mistake
taxes
whereas
others believe that we have more fundamental responsibilities towards community
. I believe that paying Add an article
the community
tax
alone is not sufficient, as there are other aspects that should be taken into account.
To begin
with, nowadays, many countries place
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have
law
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laws
of
taxes, and Change preposition
on
its
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it's
it is
citizens
to pay it
on time. So, locals believe that they have only Correct pronoun usage
them
one
duty that’s to pay tax
only. Government
planned to improve several places in different cities, to improve inhabitants living situations. Add an article
The government
For example
, in the United Arab Emirates, there are multiple nationalities who live for personal business and other
for jobs, Fix the agreement mistake
others
no
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and no
one
thinks about improvement
of the Add an article
the improvement
country
except the native citizens
. Furthermore
, individuals will not bother themselves to make any changes in the city or country
.
On the other hand
, some people believe that they have more responsibilities rather than just paying taxes. Obeying the laws and protecting the environment are
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is
one
of the citizens
' duties.
I agree that citizens
have more duties except
paying taxes. Change preposition
than
Citizens
responsibilities Change noun form
Citizens'
Citizen's
also
involve respecting each other and supporting the country
. For example
, In Dubai city
most people live friendly most likely as Add a comma
city,
a
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apply
one
family. In other words
, Dubai has a clear vision for next
thirty years from now, not only paying Correct article usage
the next
tax is
enough to see the future of the city, Wrong verb form
taxes
to
reach Correct word choice
but to
this
view every person should help the government
to improve in many sectors. For instance
, in 2018 the UAE passport became the most powerful passport in the world, and Burj Khalifa was awarded the tallest building in the world, and these all happened with the help and effort of the people and Government
.
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only is not enough to make Fix the agreement mistake
taxes
change
in the Add an article
a change
country
, I do believe the
individuals should help the Correct article usage
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government
to achieve their goal.Submitted by saeeddjcj80 on
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task response
You have presented both sides of the argument and given your opinion, which is good. However, your essay would benefit from expanding on the reasons why paying taxes alone is not sufficient and why having additional responsibilities is essential.
coherence cohesion
Your essay is mostly clear, with a logically structured introduction, body, and conclusion. However, some of your ideas could be developed further for better clarity. Aim to provide more detailed reasoning and examples for each point you make.
task response
While you have included examples, try to include a wider variety of specific, relevant examples to strengthen your arguments. This will make your essay more convincing and provide more depth to your points.
task response
Your introduction effectively sets up the discussion on the two viewpoints regarding paying taxes and additional responsibilities. This provides a strong foundation for the essay.
coherence cohesion
You have correctly included a conclusion that summarizes your main points and gives your opinion on the topic, which helps to tie your essay together.
coherence cohesion
Your essay shows a clear attempt to organize your ideas logically, with separate paragraphs for each viewpoint and a conclusion that wraps up your argument nicely.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example