Today, more people are living longer after they retire from work. What problems will it cause for individuals and society? What can be done to prevent it

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Focus on clearly addressing both parts of the prompt. Ensure you explain the problems of longer life expectancy and offer viable solutions.
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Develop your main points with more detailed explanations and specific examples.
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You have some good ideas related to education and its role in human life.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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