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You have just moved into a new home and are planning to hold a party. You are worried that the noise may disturb your neighbour. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter, introduce yourself describe your plans for the party invite your neighbour to come You should write at least 150 words.

#home #party #noise #neighbour #plans
Dear Mr. Smith, Hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
 letter to invite you to my home for a party. My name is Sophia Brown. I just moved to your nearby apartment. My flat number is 321. I worked as a physiotherapist at HCP General Hospital in our town and my husband is an engineer. I want to tell you that it is my husband's 35th birthday next Saturday.
As a consequence
, I will arrange one small party at my home. I will try that no one suffers from loud noise.
Thus
, I will put one noise controller at my main gait
as well as
 will
also
 plan to put small games that will keep children busy. I invited my all close friends and I want you
will
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also
 join us in our happiness with your whole family. Waiting for your positive reply. See you soon. Yours Sincerely, Sophia Brown.
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grammar
To improve, consider reviewing for minor grammatical errors and ensuring that sentences flow smoothly. For instance, 'I invited my all close friends' could be revised to 'I have invited all my close friends.'
single idea paragraph
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single idea. This can help to improve the overall coherence and allow the reader to follow your thoughts more easily. For example, details about the birthday party and efforts to minimize noise could be separated into their own paragraphs.
task achievement
The letter responds well to the task, providing an introduction, description of the party plans, and an invitation to the neighbor. This shows a good understanding of the task requirements.
task achievement
The tone is suitably polite and friendly, which is appropriate for this type of letter.
coherence cohesion
The letter contains a clear greeting and closing, which contributes to a structured and cohesive piece of writing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • housewarming
  • neighbourhood
  • settle in
  • concern
  • apologize
  • disturbance
  • kindly
  • considerate
  • join
  • gathering
  • introduce
  • socialize
  • appreciate
  • understanding
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