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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates the plan which takes place in Brandfield
city
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, proposing two sites to install a new shopping mall for the
area
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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although
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 S1 is located close to the
city
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centre
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 and other facilities, there is only an industrial
area
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 near S2. On the one hand, S1 is surrounded by a housing estate, a
city
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centre
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 a golf course and a park. There is a railway, which connects from northwest and southwest areas
while
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 passing the
city
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's central
area
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. The river lies between the north and southwest, which is across the
city
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centre
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. Turning to the other hand,
although
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 S2 is located on the fringe of the
area
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,
this
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area
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 is smaller than S1. There is a railway and a road around S2.
This
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 road runs south to northeast, which is separated into two roads below the
city
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centre
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 connection. In front of the railway line, there is an industrial
area
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 opposite S2.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, area, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • main road
  • benefits
  • convenience
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • workers
  • compare
  • differences
  • pros and cons
  • suitable
  • analysis
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