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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given maps illustrate the blueprint of present and future plans
of
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for
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 Islip town centre.
Overall
, the
further
planned
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plan
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 will
has
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have
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 a significant transformation
regard
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in regard
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 to new constructions of new facilities, housing, transportation services, and roads for a better living standard.
Initially
, the current town consisted of public
facilies
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facilities
such
 as shops, accommodation,
school
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a school
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 and
park
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a park
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.
Moreover
, only one main road to reach a
desire
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desired
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 destination. Looking at the planned development, public transportation and
car
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a car
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park
 are added
abjecent
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adjacent
 to the shopping centre. Meanwhile, an idea
to
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is to
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 build more housing on the
north-east
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northeast
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 side and near the
park
 to
fulfill
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fulfil
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 the extension of the population.
In addition
,a new duel highway is suggested to
contrust
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contrast
construct
 around the facilities in terms of
convenient
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convenience
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 and reduced
trafic
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traffic
 congestion.
However
, some buildings: educational
institution
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institutions
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,
park
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parks
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, and old shops still remained
unspoils
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unspoiled
 because
such
 places
still
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are still
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 needed by the communities for relaxation and academic purposes.
Lastly
,
pedestrians
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pedestrians'
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 pathway is planned, allowing them to walk safely to
next
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the next
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 places.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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