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The given table provides vital data about the amount of fast food consumed in Melbourne from 2005 to the present time and predictions for the near future.

The given table provides vital data about the amount of fast food consumed in Melbourne from 2005 to the present time and predictions for the near future.
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The supplied table indicates essential information about the proportion of fast
food
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 which was used in
Melbourne
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 from 2005 to
near
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the near
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 future in 2025. A glance at the graph reveals that the highest
amount
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 of consumed fast
food
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 is Hamburger in
Melbourne
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.
However
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,people do not
perefer
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prefer
 to eat Salad in
Melbourne
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 over the period. In 2025,the proportion of used fast
food
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 will be predicted 51 (which is the highest
amount
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 of the consuming fast
food
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 over the period),just ahead of Fried Chicken at 45 in 2025.
Moreover
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,eating
Hamburger
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 is a bit
popular
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more popular
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 than using Fried Chicken at 38 and 37 at the present,respectively.
In addition
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,the number of people who tended to eat Hamburger was 40 in 2005,compared to the
amount
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 of consuming Fried Chicken at 35 in 2005.
In contrast
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,the populations were not into eating Salad at 5 in 2005 (which was the lowest
amount
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 of
using
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fast
food
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 over the whole year),as opposed to the
amount
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 of using Fried Rice and Noodles at 6 in 2005.
Additionally
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,the proportion of consuming Fried Rice is 9 in
Melbourne
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 at the moment.
Similarly
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,it is predicted the
amount
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 of eating Fried Rice will be the same as present at 9 in 2025.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, melbourne, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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