In the interest of road safety, cyclists should be required to pass a test before they are allowed on public roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is argued that individuals who ride bicycles should be required to pass an examination in order to be allowed to use public roads in a safe way.
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essay completely agrees with the previous statement since different bicycle accidents
occur everyday
and anyone who uses the Replace the word
every day
road
(especially the ones who own a vehicle) should be aware of road
safety
.
One strong reason why I agree with this
idea is that there is an unfortunate big
amount of bicycle Correct word choice
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accidents
that happen daily in different countries. Many of these accidents
could have been avoided if cyclists were much more knowledgeable and aware of traffic rules
and road
safety
in general. For example
, last
week in Lima, Peru a 18 year old
girl decided to go on a ride without wearing a helmet thinking that it was not necessary to do it Correct your spelling
an 18-year-old
due to
the short trip she would make. Unfortunately, she got distracted because of a march happening at the moment and fell down from the bike, resulting in a high level
injury around her head.
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high-level
In addition
, we tend to keep in mind that people who drive a vehicle that possess
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a high
chances
of hurting others should be the ones learning about Fix the agreement mistake
chance
road
safety
or taking tests. However
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However,
this
is not true. Every person who uses the road
(especially that population who owns a vehicle) should be aware enough of the different traffic rules
and road
safety
guidelines since they must keep in mind any possible accident, how to avoid it and the devastating consequences of not following rules
. For example
, cyclists should learn from certain workshops such
as “Road
safety
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Safety
everyone
” and Capitalize word
Everyone
then
follow this
learning by taking a proper test.
In conclusion, it is recommended to apply a test for cyclists before getting a
permission to use the public roads. Remove the article
apply
This
is suggested due to
the high amount of bicycle accidents
that happen everyday
and the fact that anyone who uses the Replace the word
every day
road
should be aware of traffic rules
and road
safety
in order to be responsible with
his life and Change preposition
for
others’
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others
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