Some believe that it is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. dinosaurs, dodos, etc.) and, therefore, there is no reason to try to prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?
A certain amount of people imply that we should not take any action regarding the extinction of
animals
since it is a normal process
. This
essay disagrees with this
idea since different creatures get extincted
because our human race harms their Correct your spelling
extinct
environment
and it is essential to learn about environmental care and respect through help provided to different animal species.
One compelling reason why this
essay believes that we should definitely take action and help to decrease the percentage of animal extinction is because in numerous cases we are responsible for their environmental deterioration. Although
it is known that certain species have been in the process
of getting
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becoming
extincted
for years, the harm that we sometimes produce to their natural Correct your spelling
extinct
environment
,
ends up accelerating their death. Remove the comma
apply
For example
, in Tarapoto, Peru, sea turtles are getting
Verb problem
becoming
extincted
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extinct
in
a faster speed than Change preposition
at
previous
years Change preposition
in previous
due to
the amount of waste that they confuse for food in the ocean.
In addition
, we are aware that the extinction of animals
is a natural process
that has been happening since they appeared on earth
. Capitalize word
Earth
However
their time Add a comma
However,
prevelance
on Correct your spelling
prevalence
this
planet also
depends on how much we care, appreciate and respect their natural environment
. In
different Change preposition
On
occassions
we are not aware of the amount of help we can provide to protect our planet and Correct your spelling
occasions
therefore
our fauna by simply not contaminating it or helping to preserve food resources from
which Change preposition
on
animals
depend on
. Change preposition
apply
For example
, just by not polluting the ocean, we would be helping thousands of sea animals
to live longer.
In conclusion, this
essay has shown that although
getting extincted
is a normal Correct your spelling
extinct
process
in
which all animal species will go through, it is important to prevent Change preposition
apply
this
phenomenom
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phenomenon
to happen
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from happening
in
an accelerated speed. Decreasing environmental damage caused by humans and learning about how to take careChange preposition
at
, respect
and appreciate our Change preposition
of, respect
environment
are two reasons to support this
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Grammar
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Detail
Further elaborate on some points to add depth to the argument. For example, the point about humans accelerating species death through environmental damage can be expanded to include more detailed consequences and examples.
Clarity
The essay provides a clear stance on the topic and supports it with logical arguments and specific examples.
Structure
The introduction and conclusion are well-presented, clearly stating the topic and summarizing the points discussed.
Your opinion
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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
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