Some believe that it is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. dinosaurs, dodos, etc.) and, therefore, there is no reason to try to prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?

A certain amount of people imply that we should not take any action regarding the extinction of
animals
since it is a normal
process
.
This
essay disagrees with
this
idea since different creatures get
extincted
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extinct
because our human race harms their
environment
and it is essential to learn about environmental care and respect through help provided to different animal species. One compelling reason why
this
essay believes that we should definitely take action and help to decrease the percentage of animal extinction is because in numerous cases we are responsible for their environmental deterioration.
Although
it is known that certain species have been in the
process
of
getting
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extincted
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extinct
for years, the harm that we sometimes produce to their natural
environment
,
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ends up accelerating their death.
For example
, in Tarapoto, Peru, sea turtles are
getting
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becoming
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extincted
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extinct
in
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a faster speed than
previous
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in previous
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years
due to
the amount of waste that they confuse for food in the ocean.
In addition
, we are aware that the extinction of
animals
is a natural
process
that has been happening since they appeared on
earth
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.
However
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their time
prevelance
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prevalence
on
this
planet
also
depends on how much we care, appreciate and respect their natural
environment
.
In
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different
occassions
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occasions
we are not aware of the amount of help we can provide to protect our planet and
therefore
our fauna by simply not contaminating it or helping to preserve food resources
from
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which
animals
depend
on
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.
For example
, just by not polluting the ocean, we would be helping thousands of sea
animals
to live longer. In conclusion,
this
essay has shown that
although
getting
extincted
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extinct
is a normal
process
in
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which all animal species will go through, it is important to prevent
this
phenomenom
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phenomenon
to happen
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from happening
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in
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at
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an accelerated speed. Decreasing environmental damage caused by humans and learning about how to take care
, respect
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and appreciate our
environment
are two reasons to support
this
view.
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