The graph below gives information of the numbers of participants for different activitirs at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information of the numbers of participants for different activitirs at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares the
number
of
participants
for five different activities held at a social centre in Melbourne from 2000 to 2020. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that the film club
class
had by far the most
participants
over the whole period shown.
Also
,
while
the
number
of amateur dramatics
class
participants
decreased, the
figure
for musical performances
class
increased. The most popular
class
at the social centre was the film club. It started with 65
participants
in 2000, fell to 60
participants
in 2010, and nearly returned to its initial value by 2020. The
number
of
participants
in the martial arts
class
started at just above 35 and fluctuated between 30 and 40 a few times through the period shown.
However
, it returned to 35 again by 2020. The
figure
for amateur dramatics and table tennis started at 25 and 16 attendances in 2000, and after a slight increase in 2005 for both figures, they became equal with 20
participants
by 2010 . Afterwards,
while
the
figure
for table tennis
participants
rose substantially to approximately 53, the
figure
for amateur dramatics decreased sharply to just above 5
participants
. It is worth mentioning that musical performance classes had no
participants
until 2005. At that time, the
number
of
participants
increased gradually, reaching a peak of 19.
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