The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
The pie chart compares the percentages of four different locations in a town in Australia where
dance
classes
are held, and the bar graph shows the number of
participants
in three types of dances in two age groups. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that close to half of the
dance
classes
are held in private studios.
Also
, ballet
dance
was more popular among
students
under 11
years
old,
while
students
between 11 and 16 tend to join in modern
dance
classes
.
According to
the pie chart,
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studios were where most
dance
classes
took place,
while
college-based studios accounted for the least, at only %10. The percentages for school halls, and community halls (and others) are %24 and %18, respectively. Looking at the bar graph, ballet
classes
had 300
participants
aged between 11 and 16
years
old,
while
the amount of individuals younger than 11 was double that. The number of
participants
in tap
dance
classes
was almost similar in both age groups. It was 450 for people under 11
years
old and for
students
aged between 11 and 16
years
old was approximately 425. The
last
dance
class is modern dances.
While
300
students
attended modern
dance
classes
, the number of
participants
aged between 11 and 16
years
old was just above 500
participants
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • attendance
  • community centers
  • dance schools
  • private studios
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • ballroom
  • analysis
  • popularity
  • accessibility
  • cost
  • cultural trends
  • media influences
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