Some people change to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their health but also benefits the world as a wide. Discuss they view and give your own opinion

A section of
people
reckon that
to be
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vegetarian is not only good for our
body
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bodies
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but
also
for
whole
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world. In my view, not eating
meat
or
fish
has loads of advantages than disadvantages.
Argumets
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Arguments
to crutch my notion will be discussed in the forthcoming paragraphs. There are a
lot
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benefits to
be
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vegetarian.
Plethora
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of
reason
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reasons
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can be cited. First and foremost, Different diseases are increasing by leaps and bounds
due to
eating of meats and
fish
.
Thus
,
people
have
that
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fear
to
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no
vegetarians
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foods.
For example
,
whole
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world suffered a lot because of
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the corona
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corona virus
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coronavirus
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. We all know that virus came from eating
bat
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. So,
people
don't want to
loose
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their life
to
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eating any
meat
products.
Secondly
, extravagant use of red
meat
can be
parious
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various
for any
humanbeing
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human being
.
Due to
that
people
will not only face cardiovascular disease but
also
they can die from cancer.
Therefore
reason,
people
are avoiding
to eat
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meat
, and they are
started
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to vegetables.Ergo,
Therefore
reason,
people
want to make their body fit as
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to
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having fresh vegetables and lentils. Because they can get all the nutrients from flora.
Last
but not
the
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least, some
people
don't eat
meat
or
fish
due to
their religion.
For instance
,
Gujarat
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in Gujarat
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( India) almost all the
people
from
this
place are not eating
non vegetarian
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non-vegetarian
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. Because they believe that all the animals are related to their god and goddess.
Thus
, they have their sentimental value about
this
. Agglomarting all the points elaborated above it can be reiterated that, Not having
meat
or
fish
in our meals will be more helpful in many ways, like; health , religion and so on.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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