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You have bought a new camera but when you got it home you found it had some problems.You returned the camera and spoke to the company representative a week ago but the camera has still not been repaired. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: 1 Introduce yourself 2 Explain the situation 3 Say what action you would like the company to take

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to complain about
new
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camera
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 in your
company
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 and your
company
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representative
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.
Firstly
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, I am Rajabov Azizbek and I
am
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live in Muborak
city
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.I am
customer
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a customer
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 of your
company
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 and I called your
company
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representative
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. I
am
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work
in
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at
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 Amazon and I bought
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camera
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a camera
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 for my job but there
is
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 a lot of
problem
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problems
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.
Also
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company
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representative
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 did not help me.
Secondly
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, when I
brought
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bought
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the
a
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new
camera
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in
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to
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 my house I
find
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found
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a lot of
problem
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problems
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 and I returned
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camera
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the camera
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in
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to
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 your
company
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 for
repaid
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repair
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.After a week
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camera
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the camera
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did
Verb problem
was
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 not repaid and your
company
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representative
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 did not call me.
Furthermore
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,
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company
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the company
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representative
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very
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was very
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 rude and did not solve my problem and never
answer
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answered
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 my question. If you repaired my new
camera
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 I would be
gratefull
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grateful
 and change your
company
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representative
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. If you can not
repaired
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repair
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 my
camera
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, refund
fully
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me fully
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. I look forward to hearing
from
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from you
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. you. My number :914546991 Yours faithfully, Rajabov Azizbek

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coherence cohesion
Consider breaking your letter into paragraphs, each focusing on a single idea. This would improve readability and coherence.
task achievement
Pay attention to grammar and sentence structure. For instance, 'I am live' should be 'I live' and 'camera in your company' should be 'camera from your company'. Making these corrections will enhance clarity.
task achievement
You have addressed all parts of the task effectively, including introducing yourself, explaining the situation, and stating what you want the company to do.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are appropriately formal for a letter of complaint, which adds a professional tone to your writing.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • company representative
  • malfunction
  • repair
  • defect
  • disappointment
  • timeline
  • replacement
  • refund
  • purchased
  • return policy
  • customer service
  • satisfaction
  • issue
  • product quality
  • communication
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