As you wish to apply for an educational program abroad, you are writing a letter to a university’s admission department. Ask for both the pedagogic facilities and offers, and the funding options.

Dear Sir/Madam I am writing
this
letter to earn some information about the university facilities and
circumstance
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circumstances
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. I am planning to attend the
designing
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course which will be held
this
October and I need to be aware of
details
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the details
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because I am coming from another country and I have to be ready for that. I would be grateful to be informed about the course facilities;
for instance
, are there any computers and tablets available for tutees? Is a big screen prepared in classrooms for tutors to show the way they work with applications, or presenting visual aids?
Moreover
, it would be helpful to know about the exact subjects that are going to be taught. Indeed,
according to
my economic situation, I need to know about the payments and funds; is there an option for full
fund
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, or is it possible to pay the cost in diverse parts?
In addition
, I want to be noticed if there is any specific accommodation for students since in
this
way I can participate in the mentioned program
easier
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and I do not have to
be worry
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about my settlement. I am keenly looking for your response, make sure you contact me. Respectfully, Miss Ghazaleh Shadman
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task achievement
In the opening sentence, 'earn' some information can be replaced with 'obtain' or 'receive' for a more natural expression.
task achievement
‘Circumstance' should be replaced with 'circumstances' or 'conditions' to better align with standard usage.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each question is concise to improve clarity. For instance, 'is there an option for full fund' can be refined to 'are full scholarships available?'.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a clear and respectful tone, appropriate for the context.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect, making it easier to follow.
greeting and closing
The structure of the letter, including salutation and closing, is very well done.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • admission department
  • educational program
  • pedagogic facilities
  • libraries
  • laboratories
  • online resources
  • workshops
  • seminars
  • training programs
  • funding options
  • scholarships
  • grants
  • assistantships
  • eligibility criteria
  • application process
  • financial concerns
  • requirements
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