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The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The given maps compare changes that happened
fto
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to
 the site of College 2 several times( 2006 and now).
Overall
, it is important that the vegetation areas
destroyed
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;
however
, buildings which help students to have a good time in their institute have been increasing.
According to
 the pictures, In the past next to the road was the
car
park
, yet today, a bus stop and
car
park
 , which is the same region as
the
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in the
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 past, but
devided
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divided
to
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into
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car
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the car
a car
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park
 and bike storage. The Library, which was next to the
car
park
, has moved to the zone which is near two college buildings, which are the same as the prior;
additionally
, it has two roads to them. The graphs illustrate The
Sport
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Sports
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centre
 is
the
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in the
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 same position as the
last
 time;
moreover
, they added
Sports
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the Sports
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centre
 next to it
instead
 of the
last
 Library. The previous path has
altered
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been altered
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 to a square which has a
Cafeterian
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Cafeteria
 in the
centre
;
furthermore
, it has 5 different roads to the Sports
centre
,
car
park
, bus stop, and
callege
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college
 departments.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, park, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underwent significant changes
  • consisted of
  • large open space
  • utilized
  • relocated
  • limited facilities and amenities
  • wider range of facilities and amenities
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