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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking the visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two period

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking the visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two period
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The charts illustrate the proportion of satisfaction by visitors to Ashdown Museum before and after
refurbishment
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Overall
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, the dissatisfaction rate was the highest before
refurbishment
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 at 40% and the same was with satisfaction after
refurbishment
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however
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, in both surveys no response remained the same. The Satisfaction rate shows an increase of 10% after
refurbishment
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however
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, the dissatisfied ratio experienced a decrease of 25%.
Moreover
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, there was an increase in the very satisfactory visitors to the before
refurbishment
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 ratio. In both
survey
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surveys
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, no response was the same.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words refurbishment with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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