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In many places,new homes are needed but the only space available for them is countryside.some people believe it is more important to protect the country side and not build new homes there.what is your opinion about this?

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Introduction
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this
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 developing era, new shelters are
sital
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vital
suitable
 for
individal
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individual
individuals
 but
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lessues
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is
 sure
major
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furtur
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future
 and one can
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not afford
home
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a home
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 in
city
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the city
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ared
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area
are
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result
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 more
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are
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is
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 used to construct
news
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new
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building
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buildings
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countryside
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the countryside
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.
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 some
people
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believe
 that it would be reserved for natural
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resources
. I totally agree with
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statement
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 essay.
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There are several
seasons
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reasons
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 behind
develop
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developing
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new
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a new
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house
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houses
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at
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in
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the musc
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musc
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 area.
such
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 as,
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 urbanisation,
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little
space
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 is
availuble
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available
 which is
extenda
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extended
 exorbitant to
puschase
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purchase
.
people
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 choose
o
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to
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 live in
suburbs
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the suburbs
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 in order to get
eid
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rid
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off
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of
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 air pollution,
truftic
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traffic
,
noise
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and noise
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 pollution.
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,
people
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 like to eat healthy food
that is
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on
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porcible
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possible
forcible
 in
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the countryde
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countryde
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country
. Despite suffering from various diseases
people
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 are choosing
countryside
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the countryside
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 to explore more
naturel
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natural
 resources.
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, it would have more
space
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 used for building new houses to
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cope with
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 these requirements.
Body paragraph 2
However
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, it would have
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a plethora
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 of demerits
while
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 constructing new homes
at
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in
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 town areas. It could
hampered
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hamper
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ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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as well as
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also
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also,
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 plenty of chances to exposure to noxious gases, water pollution congestion and air contaminations When construction of multistory
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buildings
leads
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lead
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 to hazardous
etfects
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effects
Body paragraph 5
on environment. It
also
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have
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negative
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a negative
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 influence on
is
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farming.
Conclusion
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conclude
, every coin has two sides, But having plenty of demerits for
constaction
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construction
 at the
constycide
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countywide
 leads to
impend
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impending
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 natural ecosystem and
resourses
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resources
 over there.
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,
people
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has
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have
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 to understand
value
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the value
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 of it and
do
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not try to hinder it.

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The essay addresses the topic but struggles with clarity and organization. Work on presenting your points in a clear and concise manner, ensuring each paragraph has a single clear idea and connects logically to the next.
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There are multiple grammatical errors, spelling mistakes, and awkward phrasings. Regular practice with grammar and having your work reviewed by others can help improve this.
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Use specific examples to support your main points. This will make your argument stronger and more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Your essay lacks a logical structure and clear organization. Aim to write a clearer introduction, body, and conclusion with smooth transitions between ideas.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea, supporting your thesis in a systematic manner.
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You have addressed both perspectives on the issue, which shows an understanding of the topic's complexity.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • infrastructure
  • urban sprawl
  • sustainable development
  • ecosystem
  • cultural heritage
  • affordable housing
  • community cohesion
  • natural landscapes
  • environmental impact
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