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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compatisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compatisons where relevant.
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The given map compares the
changings
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of
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in
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 a village, which is located in Ryemouth, from 1995 to today.
Overall
, over the time period, increment of housing and new sports facilities have been the most significant differences as the result of population growth. In 1995, there were 12 houses in the north-western part of the village. 4 houses have been constructed
to
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 that area since 1995.
In addition
, the road, which used to surround the housing site, has been extended to the west. When it comes to
north-eastern
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the north-eastern
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 side, forest
park
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parks
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 and
farm land
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farmland
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 have been destroyed completely in order to build golf
field
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fields
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 and tennis courts.
Southern
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The southern
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 part of the village has seen numerous
changings
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changes
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 as well.
Fishing
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The fishing
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 port was demolished completely and related fish markets, which are located at
sea
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the
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 shore, were knocked off to build apartments.
Also
, shops
locating
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located
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 across the road have been turned into restaurants. The only development of the south-eastern side was
car
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a car
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 park that was built
nearby
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near
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 the hotel.
Finally
,
cafe
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a cafe
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that
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apply
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located at the
sea shore
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seashore
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 still remains.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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