The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010.
The line
graph
illustrates the information about the yearly income of three bakeries in Calgary (Amandine Bakery, Mari Bakeshop and Bolo Cakery), since
2000-Change preposition
from
2010
, by presenting in Change preposition
to 2010
dollars
.
Overall
, Bolo Cakery has increased trend
, rising to the
higher Correct article usage
a
rank
at the end
. While
Mari Bakeshop has decreased trend
, felling to the lowest rank
. It is clearly noticeable that Amandine Bakery has remained stable,
before significantly Remove the comma
apply
increased
to the peak of the Wrong verb form
increasing
graph
.
Focus on blue
line, Mari Add an article
the blue
Bakershop
Correct your spelling
Bakeshop
has
the greatest amount of income in 2000 at around 80000 Wrong verb form
had
dollars
, comparing
to others. After that, the Wrong verb form
compared
trend
of blue
Correct article usage
the blue
graph
become
fluctuated and dramatically decreased to the smallest rate (40000 Verb problem
apply
dollars
) at the end
of the period.
On the other hands
, the income of Amandine Fix the agreement mistake
hand
Bekery
and Bolo Cakery has Correct your spelling
Bakery
similar
rising Add an article
a similar
trend
. In 2000s
, Change the article
the 2000s
yellow
line started at the lowest point (2000 Add an article
the yellow
a yellow
dollars
) before gradually went
up to the second Wrong verb form
going
rank
. Moreover
, there was a stable trend
in the green graph
. Then
, it significantly climbed to the top rank
in 2010s
.Change the article
the 2010s
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