The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010.

The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in

Calgary, 2000-2010.
The line
graph
illustrates the information about the yearly income of three bakeries in Calgary (Amandine Bakery, Mari Bakeshop and Bolo Cakery),
since
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2000-
2010
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, by presenting in
dollars
.
Overall
, Bolo Cakery has increased
trend
, rising to
the
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higher
rank
at the end
.
While
Mari Bakeshop has decreased
trend
, felling to the lowest
rank
. It is clearly noticeable that Amandine Bakery has remained stable
,
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before significantly
increased
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to the peak of the
graph
. Focus on
blue
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line, Mari
Bakershop
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Bakeshop
has
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the greatest amount of income in 2000 at around 80000
dollars
,
comparing
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to others. After that, the
trend
of
blue
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graph
become
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fluctuated and dramatically decreased to the smallest rate (40000
dollars
)
at the end
of the period. On the other
hands
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, the income of Amandine
Bekery
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Bakery
and Bolo Cakery has
similar
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a similar
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rising
trend
. In
2000s
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,
yellow
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the yellow
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line started at the lowest point (2000
dollars
) before gradually
went
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up to the second
rank
.
Moreover
, there was a stable
trend
in the green
graph
.
Then
, it significantly climbed to the top
rank
in
2010s
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, dollars, trend, rank with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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