Too much attention is given to headline-grabbing disaster like earthquakes and floods. Governments should concentrate their resources on educating people about their risks they face nearer to home, which can cost far more lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this.

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It is undeniable that a headline-grabbing disaster

such

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as earthquakes and floods is paramount for governments across the globe. Some

people

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claim that

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issue is exaggerated and there is more important

educating

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people

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about other tragedies which have more victims. Personally,

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I do not refuse

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option, meanwhile, I believe two sides are vital for protecting lives. On the one hand, natural catastrophes like tsunamis, floods and earthquakes

happend

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happen

happened

unexpectedly.

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modern technology and

developtions

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developing

in natural

sceinces

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sciences

, disasters can be not predicted and

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situation cause a lot of citizens' lives that the governments

forced

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to allow a great amount of the budget for building

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a place

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place

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places

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accommodete

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accommodate

temporally and hospitalisation of victims in

short

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the short

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term and

reconstractions

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reconstructions

reconstruction

in long term.

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, it is obvious that natural catastrophes are

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a crutial

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crutial

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crucial

critical

problem despite they

happend

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happened

happen

occasionally. On

the

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another

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other

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hand, there are more heavy tragedies

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as traffic

accidence

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accidents

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and infectional

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infectional

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infectious

illnesses which are caused by

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human

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ignorence

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ignorance

or irresponsibility. Authorities need to allow more resources

on educating

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people

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about these man-made catastrophes.

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, more

people

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are not aware of some

infectional

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infection

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infections

diseases like HIV,

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and hepatites

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hepatites

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hepatitis

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, with which factors

contominate

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contaminate

contaminated

and

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result

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results

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results in

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death.

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, victims of traffic crimes

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as drunken driving,

speeding

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and speeding

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has

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have

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been

increasingly

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increasing

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apply

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. In conclusion,

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natural disasters that lead to a

gigant

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gigantic

number of

death

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deaths

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are

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undeniable

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important for governments, it is equally crucial to acknowledge the vital role of man-made tragedies which can

be tackle

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with education among reasons of death in

modern

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the modern

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world.

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, a

balaced

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balanced

approach that

appriciates

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appreciates

the significance of both aspects is the key to

fosterin

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fostering

foster

holistic development and maximising

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a future

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task achievement

The essay adequately addresses the prompt but could use more specific examples and details to fully support the arguments. For instance, in discussing natural disasters, providing specific statistics or citing recent events could add weight to your argument.

task achievement

There are several grammatical errors and spelling mistakes that slightly detract from readability. Take care to proofread and edit carefully. For example, words like 'developtions' should be 'developments' and 'sceinces' should be 'sciences'.

coherence cohesion

Logical structure is present, but some sentences need more clarity. Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea that is logically developed. The transitions between the points could be smoother.

coherence cohesion

The introduction and conclusion are reasonably effective, but the conclusion could be more strongly tied back to the arguments presented. This will make your closing statement more impactful.

task achievement

The essay presents a balanced view, acknowledging both sides of the argument which is a strong point in addressing the prompt comprehensively.

coherence cohesion

The introduction and conclusion provide a clear framework for the essay, helping the reader understand your overall stance.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

275 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

headline-grabbing
disasters
earthquakes
floods
government resources
educating people
risks
cost lives
closer to home
prevent
mitigate
damage
loss of life
responsibility
prioritize
safety
well-being
citizens
disaster preparedness
national curriculum
balancing resources
preparedness
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