The graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries in tonnes. Summarise the informantion by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries in tonnes.

Summarise the informantion by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares the number of imported
tea
and
coffee
by
Canada
,the US,
Germany
and the
UK
in
tonnes
measure. It is obvious that the leading market
of
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importing
tea
compared to the other three countries is the
UK
which makes 80000
tonnes
.
On the other
hand
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hand,
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we have
Germany
which is overtaking other countries in the import of
tea
by providing 50000
tonnes
.
While
there are countries leading
market
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markets
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in certain
type
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types
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of drink,
however
,
Canada
and the US import almost the same amount of
tea
and
coffee.US
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coffee. The US
imported a bit more
tea
than
Canada
which is approximately 21000
tonnes
whereas
Canada
imported 20000
tonnes
.
In addition
,40000
tonnes
were imported by the US
while
Canada
imported a bit less which is 39000
tonnes
. Surely the main importer of
tea
is the
UK
which imported 80000
tonnes
doubling the number of
Germany
which imported 40000
tonnes
.
However
,
Germany
leads the market of
coffee
by importing 50000
tonnes
of
coffee
while
UK
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the UK
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imports 30000
tonnes
which is significantly lower than the
UK
's number.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, canada, germany, uk, tonnes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • imports
  • tonnes
  • volume
  • trend
  • contrast
  • pattern
  • average
  • country-specific data
  • significant difference
  • beverage
  • ranking
  • highlight
  • fluctuate
  • proportion
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