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The graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries in tonnes. Summarise the informantion by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries in tonnes. Summarise the informantion by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart compares the number of imported
tea
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 and
coffee
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 by
Canada
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,the US,
Germany
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 and the
UK
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 in
tonnes
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 measure. It is obvious that the leading market
of
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for
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 importing
tea
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 compared to the other three countries is the
UK
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 which makes 80000
tonnes
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 .
On the other
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hand
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 we have
Germany
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 which is overtaking other countries in the import of
tea
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 by providing 50000
tonnes
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.
While
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 there are countries leading
market
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markets
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 in certain
type
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types
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 of drink,
however
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,
Canada
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 and the US import almost the same amount of
tea
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 and
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coffee.US
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coffee. The US
 imported a bit more
tea
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 than
Canada
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 which is approximately 21000
tonnes
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whereas
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Canada
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 imported 20000
tonnes
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.
In addition
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,40000
tonnes
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 were imported by the US
while
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Canada
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 imported a bit less which is 39000
tonnes
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. Surely the main importer of
tea
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 is the
UK
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 which imported 80000
tonnes
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 doubling the number of
Germany
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 which imported 40000
tonnes
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.
However
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,
Germany
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 leads the market of
coffee
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 by importing 50000
tonnes
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 of
coffee
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while
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UK
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the UK
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 imports 30000
tonnes
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 which is significantly lower than the
UK
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's number.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, canada, germany, uk, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • imports
  • tonnes
  • volume
  • trend
  • contrast
  • pattern
  • average
  • country-specific data
  • significant difference
  • beverage
  • ranking
  • highlight
  • fluctuate
  • proportion
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