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People say that it is a waste of time for high school students to learn literature such as novels and poems. Do you agree or disagree ?

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Learning about a nation's literary and cultural works is an important aspect of our education. I mostly agree, that
students
 should be taught about famous novels and poems
however
, it should be done in moderation to ensure that the material is understood properly. On one hand, by familiarizing yourself with different kinds of literature and poems, you are able to broaden and expand your vocabulary and lexical skills.
Firstly
, let's take reading historical books
for example
.
Students
 should be encouraged to read books or novels that fall into the classic genre, as they give us a different perspective on how everyday life used to look
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in the past. By reading and analyzing famous archaic texts, we are able
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 a picture and imagine different political or social situations in the previous centuries, and eventually compare them to what they look like today.
Additionally
, educating ourselves on the mistakes and conflicts made in the past
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 can help us prevent them from happening again,
therefore
 minimizing the need for pointless arguments.
On the other hand
, high school
students
 often have a packed schedule and have to prepare and study for multiple subjects at once.
Moreover
, there are countless important historical literary works that deserve to be
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 there is not enough time to get through them all. It can be very time-consuming to analyze an entire novel, and it is even harder to really understand what the author meant.
Therefore
, having
students
 read multiple books and poems can be counterproductive and take away from the benefits that come with learning about various cultures and types of literature.
To sum up
, it is essential we are educated on the importance of literature and other classical works as they provide a unique window to the past and help us imagine what life was like before.
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task achievement
You have addressed the prompt well, mentioning both sides of the argument. However, ensure you provide a clear stance whether you agree or disagree entirely rather than leaning towards a balanced view. This can strengthen your task achievement.
task achievement
Try to avoid using vague terms like 'famous novels and poems' and mention specific examples of literary works to support your points better.
coherence cohesion
The essay is mostly coherent, but transitions between points can be smoother. For example, use transitional phrases like 'In contrast' or 'On the contrary' to clearly mark the shift from one idea to the next.
coherence cohesion
Spend some time working on lexical accuracy and variation. For instance, instead of frequently using 'different', consider synonyms like 'varied' or 'diverse'. This will add richness to your essay.
coherence cohesion
You have structured the essay well, with a clear introduction and conclusion.
task achievement
You have made good points about the benefits of learning literature in terms of vocabulary development and understanding historical context.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Critical thinking
  • Analytical skills
  • Cultural awareness
  • Empathy
  • Language proficiency
  • Vocabulary
  • Grammar
  • Comprehension
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Creativity
  • Imagination
  • Moral understanding
  • Ethical dilemmas
  • Perspective
  • Tradition
  • Human experiences
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