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🔶Nowadays more and more business meetings and business trainings are taking place online. 🔸Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Due to
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 the rapid advancement in
technology
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technology,
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 many business
meeting
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meetings
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 are
organising
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organised
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 virtually.
Although
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 it has benefits
such
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 as
cost
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efficeny
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efficiency
,
much
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and much
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convienent
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convenient
,
however
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, there are
also
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 some drawbacks of
this
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 new
phenomina
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phenomena
phenomenon
, which will
be discuss
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 in upcoming paragraphs. On the
one
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 hand,
by
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apply
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taking place
virtually meeting
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virtual meetings
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it
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apply
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leads to
reduce
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a reduction
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of
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in
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cost
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meetings
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.
As if
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If
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one
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attending
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attends
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meeting
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a meeting
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 online the
cost
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 of space and
other thing
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another thing
other things
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such
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 as digital
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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,
snacks
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and snacks
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 , would be decreased which can be added to
employee's
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the employee's
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 pay cheque.
Moreover
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, not only for employers it
also
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 gives
benefit
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benefits
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 to
worker
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workers
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 as they can work from home online, which can
leads
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lead
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 to provide more
felixibilty
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flexibility
 for
one
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.
For instance
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, in
this
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 era of
the
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apply
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globolisation
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globalisation
globalization
, business
meetings
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 can take place online without leaving your own country which saves both time and money
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also
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and also
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provide
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provides
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felixibilty
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flexibility
.
On the other hand
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, there is no doubt technology makes life easier for mankind .
however
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 , there
is
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are
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also
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 some
drawback
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drawbacks
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 of attending
meetings
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 online,
such
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 as lack of concentration especially in
undeveloping
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undeveloped
 nations. To
elobrate
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illustrate
 it,
due to
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 lack of progress in some
countries
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countries,
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 internet connection is not that much reliable as
relatively
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 to the developed
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one's
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ones
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, which can result
as
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in
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 distraction or
loose
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loss
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 of connection
while
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 attending
meetings
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.
In addition
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 ,
virtually
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virtual
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meeting
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meetings
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also
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 might be
little
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a little
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 risky for those who
worked
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work
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 on confidential
informations
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information
pieces of information
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such
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 as business revenue, profits and other legal documents. As it can be hacked by cyber experts. In conclusion,
undoubtly
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undoubtedly
, attending online
meeting
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meetings
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 has benefits
Such
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 as
cost
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 reduction, efficiency and many more.
however
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 , it
also
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have
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has
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few
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a few
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disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 which can be
counter
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countered
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 by technology in future.

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coherence cohesion
Focus on improving the logical flow between paragraphs. Make sure each paragraph connects smoothly to the next.
task achievement
Work on avoiding repetition of ideas. Try to introduce fresh points and perspectives in each paragraph.
task achievement
Pay attention to grammar and spelling errors. For example, 'loose of connection' should be 'loss of connection' and 'felixibilty' should be 'flexibility.'
task achievement
You provided clear examples to support your points, which adds strength to your arguments.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps to frame your arguments well.
task achievement
You raised relevant points on both the advantages and disadvantages of online business meetings, showing a balanced approach to the topic.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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