🔶Nowadays more and more business meetings and business trainings are taking place online. 🔸Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
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meetings
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efficeny
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efficiency
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and much
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convenient
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apply
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meetings
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flexibility
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globalisation
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flexibility
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drawbacks
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undeveloped
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loss
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meeting
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meetings
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work
informations
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information
pieces of information
such
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undoubtedly
meeting
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meetings
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however
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has
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a few
disadvantage
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disadvantages
counter
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countered
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