The chart shows the main methods of transportation for people travelling to a university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

The chart shows the main methods of transportation for people travelling to a university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
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The pie chart displays which transportation system is used for reaching the university in England, Scotland and Wales in the years 2004 and 2009.
Overall
,
cars
and buses are dominant ways for people to travel to schools rather than trains and
cars
.
Moreover
, the rate of using public transportation is down. At the beginning of the period, the data shows that
cars
were the most dominant method, accounting for 51
percent
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.
This
indicates that
cars
played a crucial role during
this
time. Meanwhile, Buses started at 33
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, showing a lower but still significant presence compared to
cars
. Bicycles had a moderate portion with only 9
percent
. walking were less than bicycles with about 5
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. Trains had the smallest share, with only 3
percent
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, highlighting its minimal percentage at the start of the period. As time progressed, a noticeable
occured
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occurred
. After 5 years
car
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cars
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experienced a sharp decrease to 28
percent
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, reflecting a significant change in
its
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their
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role.
In contrast
,
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the bus
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bus
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buses
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saw a rise to 46
percent
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, indicating
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growing importance. Meanwhile, Bicycle reached 16
percent
by 2009. Walking rose slightly with about 2
percent
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.
This
overall
trend highlights the dynamic nature of these categories, with
Car
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either
solidfying
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solidifying
or losing
its
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their
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dominance
while
bus and bicycle
experinced
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experienced
experience
their own shifts, indicating changing preferences or external factors over time.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Mode of transportation
  • Significant percentage
  • Noticeable decrease/increase
  • Environmentally friendly
  • Public transit systems
  • Commuting habits
  • Relatively stable
  • Sustainable
  • Collective modes of transportation
  • Environmental awareness
  • Economic factors
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