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You hired a carcomapny .While you were driving you had a small accident . Write a letter tothe company to explain it.Whwn and where you hired it. Describe how the accident happened . What kind of action did you take after the accident.

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you about the accident
happened
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that happened
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 with the
car
 that I rented from your motor company on 23rd of
september
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September
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. .
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.
...
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 I hired it for a week for going
to
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on to
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 planned trip
of
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to
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kelowna
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Kelowna
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along with
 my family .
This
car
 is
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a honda
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honda
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Honda
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car
 in black
color
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colour
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 and
2021model
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2021 model
. The accident took place at the highway 11. When we were returning from vacation. I was in the middle
lane
 of 3 lanes,
a
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and a
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car
 from
right
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the right
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signaled
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signalled
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 to change the
lane
 and get into the
lane
 right away without giving me any chance to speed off my
car
 and give him space to enter
into
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apply
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the
lane
. .
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.
...
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Then
 his
car
 hit
to
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apply
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my
car
 and mine hit
to
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another
car
 that was beside me in the left
lane
..
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.
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The front right part and back left part of the
car
is
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are
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 damaged because of hitting from both sides. I stopped the
car
 immediately on
thge
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the
 side and called 911. I have
also
 filed
claim
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a claim
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 to
insurance
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the insurance
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 company and explained
them
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everything about the incident.They will follow up
you
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with you
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 in
few
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a few
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 days to get
the
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more information about
vehicle
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the vehicle
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. I am not sure about the 100% recovery of damage
otherwise
 I will pay
rest
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the rest
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 of the amount. Hope you will understand my situation and let me know if you get any response from them.
Your
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Yours
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 sincerely, Arshdeep Kaur
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task achievement
You have included the main points of the prompt, but it would be beneficial to add more details about the hiring process and your communication with the insurance company.
coherence cohesion
Try to improve the logical flow of your letter. The sequence of events could be clearer, and using transition words would enhance readability.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph communicates a single main idea clearly. For instance, the paragraphs about the accident explanation can be broken down for clarity.
coherence cohesion
You have included all necessary parts of a letter, such as a greeting and closing.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is appropriate for the context, maintaining a formal and respectful tone.
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