IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
#prices #metals #summarise #information #features #comparisons
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The previous line graph illustrates the
cost
Use synonyms
 in
dollars
Use synonyms
 per oz. of
gold
Use synonyms
, platinum and
palladium
Use synonyms
 over time from 2013 to 2021.
Overall
Linking Words
, it can be clearly seen that
gold
Use synonyms
 and
palladium
Use synonyms
 exhibited a clear increase,
although
Linking Words
palladium
Use synonyms
 revealed the highest growth.
In contrast
Linking Words
,
although
Linking Words
 platinum started the trend with the highest
cost
Use synonyms
, it recorded a certain fall across the years, displaying the lowest
cost
Use synonyms
 in the
last
Linking Words
year
Use synonyms
. In detail, in the
year
Use synonyms
 2013
gold
Use synonyms
 and
palladium
Use synonyms
 began with a price of just below 1500
dollars
Use synonyms
 and around 750
dollars
Use synonyms
, respectively.
Although
Linking Words
 both prices demonstrated some fluctuation across the years,
at the end
Linking Words
 of the period (2021)
palladium
Use synonyms
 had a dramatic increase of just below 2500
dollars
Use synonyms
 followed by
gold
Use synonyms
 with around 1750
dollars
Use synonyms
 per oz.
In contrast
Linking Words
, even though platinum showcased the highest
cost
Use synonyms
 at the
begining
Correct your spelling
beginning
 of the period in the
year
Use synonyms
 2013, it faced a significant decline with just over 1000
dollars
Use synonyms
 per oz in its
cost
Use synonyms
 in the
year
Use synonyms
 2021.
Submitted by nila.hiperu on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, in contrast".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words cost, dollars, gold, palladium, year with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: