The graph below shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The previous line graph illustrates the levels of contamination displayed in
micrograms
per cubic metre across the
years
1600 to 2000 in the city of London.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that
sulphur
dioxide
and
smoke
started with an almost non-existent level of pollution.
However
, they both showed not only some fluctuation but
also
growth across the
years
, especially
sulphur
dioxide
which displayed a much higher proportion than
smoke
.
At the end
of the period, they both decreased as how they were at the beginning. In detail, in 1600,
sulphur
dioxide
and
smoke
demonstrated a level of contamination of just over 0
micrograms
per cubic metre.
However
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However,
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sulphur
dioxide
revealed a dramatic increase of around 750
micrograms
from the
years
1700 to 1900, the one that completely decreased in the year 2000.
In contrast
,
although
smoke
also
exhibited some growth over the
years
(especially a dramatic increase between the
years
1850 and 1900, showing levels around 275
micrograms
per cubic metre), it showcased certain fluctuations and
finally
by the year 2000 it recorded a sharp decrease to around 0%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words micrograms, years, sulphur, dioxide, smoke with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "displayed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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