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The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
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The Bar Chart displays the
amount
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 of
hours
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in
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on
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 average that four different countries spent in relaxing activities during vacations in Greece
8/2019
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in 8/2019
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.
Overall
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,
Chinese
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 and
Americans
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 spent more
hours
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 reading books and going to the
beach
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,
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Turkish
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while Turkish
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 and
Brazilians
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 like to go to the
beach
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. All the countries
used
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spent
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less
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fewer
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hours
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to
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visiting new places, being
Americans
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 and
Turkish
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who used
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spent
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 more
hours
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in
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this
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 activity.
Chinese
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tourist
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tourists
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 spent 8
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 reading books, almost
doubled
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 the
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Americans
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number of Americans
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 that used 5
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,
Brazilians
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 and
Turkish
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use
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 4
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Brazilians
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 stayed
in
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on
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 the
beach
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6
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hours
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 just 1 hour more than
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Turkish
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the Turkish
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 who spent 5
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 and doubled the
Chinese
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 that went to the
beach
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 for 3
hours
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Americans
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 spent 4
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 relaxing at the
beach
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Americans
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Turkish
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 spent the same
hours
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 visiting places with 3
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 each, tripled
Chinese
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 with 1 hour and doubled
Brazilians
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 with only 2
hours
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, chinese, americans, beach, turkish, brazilians with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number
  • leisure activities
  • tourists
  • nationalities
  • cultural trends
  • interests
  • vacation
  • influence
  • participation
  • impact
  • weather
  • events
  • festivals
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