The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
The Bar Chart displays the
amount
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number
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of
hours
in
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on
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average that four different countries spent in relaxing activities during vacations in Greece
8/2019
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in 8/2019
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.
Overall
,
Chinese
and
Americans
spent more
hours
reading books and going to the
beach
,
Turkish
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while Turkish
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and
Brazilians
like to go to the
beach
. All the countries
used
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spent
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less
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fewer
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hours
to
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visiting new places, being
Americans
and
Turkish
who used
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spent
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more
hours
in
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this
activity.
Chinese
tourist
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tourists
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spent 8
hours
reading books, almost
doubled
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the
Americans
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number of Americans
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that used 5
hours
,
Brazilians
and
Turkish
use
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4
hours
.
Brazilians
stayed
in
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the
beach
6
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hours
just 1 hour more than
Turkish
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the Turkish
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who spent 5
hours
and doubled the
Chinese
that went to the
beach
for 3
hours
.
Americans
spent 4
hours
relaxing at the
beach
.
Americans
and
Turkish
spent the same
hours
visiting places with 3
hours
each, tripled
Chinese
with 1 hour and doubled
Brazilians
with only 2
hours
.
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