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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compatisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compatisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate
about
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the evolution of Ryemouth town from 1995 to the present day.
Overall
, the increase
of
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 population made the greenery spaces
changed
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into housing and
sport
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facilities
. In the present day, numerous house
building
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buildings
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has
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 been added
in
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 the west
side
 of the town to tackle
of
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the rise of resident numbers.
Additionally
, the shopping complex and fish market
in
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 the south
side
 have
rebuilt
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 into
restaurants
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 and apartments zone.
Due to
 those circumstances, the fishing port that
established
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 in 1995 has been demolished.
Hence
,
in
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 the east
side
 of the village, farmland and forest park have advanced into sports
facilities
 including
golf
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 area and tennis courts.
Lastly
,
in
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 the southeast
side
, the new parking lot
has
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 built
besides
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 the hotel.
On the other hand
, the cafe that was located across
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 hotel is the only authentic building since 1995.
To sum up
, the maps show
the
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 comparison of the designs of
Ryemouth
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 countryside in 1995 and in the present. The
growth
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 number of villagers demanded governments
to
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build many housing
facilities
such
 as housing and apartment
area
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 that
previously
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were previously
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 occupied by empty spaces and fish markets. To add up, sports
facilities
also
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were also
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 established from the land that previously functioned as ranch and forestry.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words facilities, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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