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The top ten nations producing and consuming electricity in 2014 is illustrated in the given bar chart.

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The top ten nations producing and consuming
electricity
 in 2014
is
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 illustrated in the given bar chart. In general, China emerged as a leader in making and using
electricity
,
while
 Korea Republic
least
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lost
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 almost all, and most countries
has
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the
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electrical energy production more than consumption. In 2014, China generated nearly 5,400B
kWh
, the highest among nations listed
while
 the US produced about 4,000B
kWh
. Both countries used less energy than creating with over 5,300B
kWh
 and nearly 3,900B
kWh
, respectively.
Furthermore
, the
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 countries exhibited significant disparities in
electricity
 production and consumption compared to China and the US. Notably, Russia was ranked third with the electrical energy generating just over 1,000B
kWh
, meanwhile using less
20
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B
kWh
 than creating.
Conversely
, Japan, Canada, France, Brazil, India and
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the Korea
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Korea
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Korean
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 Republic all produced and used under 1,000B
kWh
, with the discrepancy between them
is
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 about 50 to 200B
kWh
.
Last
 but not least, Germany demonstrated the difference in the list, with the proportion of produced
electricity
 was less than used
its
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, about b527 and 583B
kWh
, in that order.
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