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There is a problem with the changing rooms in the sports centre that you visit.You have complained several times but with no success. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre.In your letter: •describe what the problem with the changing rooms is •say what happened the last times you complained •explain what you want the manager to do.

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to complain about
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the sport
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sport
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sports
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 center. Your sports
center
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centre
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 has a problem with the changing rooms.I complained before but nothing changed.
Firstly
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, there are a lot of problems in some clothes rooms. I don't know which to tell.
Also
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,the changing room is so cramped and messy.
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,the
behavior
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behaviour
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 of the servant is very rude.The dressing room is not full of tools. It is been exactly a week since
,
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apply
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I
last
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 complained,
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however
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however,
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 there is no result.
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,I am very disappointed. The staff was irresponsible.They promised but didn't.In my opinion, only I didn't complain. I hope you feel responsible.Maybe, it will be good based on the changing room.I want to change
dreessing
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dressing
 rooms.Many people want it, we are waiting for the result. I would appreciate it if you could look into
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 matter as soon as possible.I look forward to hearing from you. Sincerely, Komosh.
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single idea per paragraph
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single clear idea to improve readability and coherence.
suitable writing tone
Use a more formal and polite tone consistently throughout the letter to better match the intended audience and purpose.
complete response
The letter provides a full response to the prompt, addressing all required points.
greeting and closing
The opening and closing of the letter are appropriate and polite, effectively setting the tone for formal correspondence.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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