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The pictures illustrate the way how plastic bottles are being recycled. It is plastic circle which never ends up.

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The pictures illustrate the way how
plastic
 bottles are being recycled. It is
plastic
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a plastic
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 circle which never ends up. These 9 steps, which are shown on the diagram, from collecting bottles to producing daily routine products, provide convenient opportunities for humanity. Beginning with collecting
plastic
 for special purposes, it transfers to recycling centres. In those
places
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places,
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 people divide them
in
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into
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 2 groups, those
ones which
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that
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 are appropriate for reuse, are being compressed with machines into blocks.
Them
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They
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 are being crushed and washed
further
 to get fine particles.
Subsequently
, it is ready for forming a new raw.
The next step is
plastic
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a plastic
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pellets
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pellet
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producing
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apply
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. Tiny pieces that we got,
being
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were
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 placed into a shredding machine to get pellets, and
need
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needed
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 to be heated by high
temperature
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 to have raw materials. These raw
is
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materials are
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 usually used to create new
plastic
staff
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stuff
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 like bottles or
office
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,and
also
 can be used as a material for clothes.
To conclude
 all the information we determined above, bottle recycling is one of the most rational ways to reuse rubbish.
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task response
In your introduction, try to be more specific about the process you are describing and avoid vague language like 'plastic circle which never ends up.' Clarify what you mean, perhaps by saying 'a continuous recycling process for plastic bottles.'
clear comprehensive ideas
Make sure your points are fully developed. For instance, you could elaborate more on the '9 steps' and specify each step more clearly to make your essay informative.
coherence cohesion
Improve your grammatical range and accuracy, especially with articles and the use of 'this' and 'these.' Some sentences are also awkward and need restructuring. For instance, 'Them are being crushed' should be 'They are crushed.'
logical structure
Your essay clearly describes the main stages of the recycling process in a logical order.
introduction conclusion present
You have provided a solid overall conclusion that underscores the importance of recycling plastic bottles.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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