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you received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or try to get a job. you think he/she should get a job. write a letter to this friend. in your letter. say why he/she would not enjoy going to college. explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

#friend #advice #college #job #idea
Dear Man I am writing to say, I hope
this
 letter can help you with
this
 difficult decision. As I know you, you are not the person who will sit and cram some kind of subject. Finding a job is better for you, because of
it
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your behaviour which is not giving
to
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you to study by spending time in the same place for 4 or 5 years. You are more like to take
actions more
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 than
cramming
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 in college. If I were you, I
will
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 rather choose
finding
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to find
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 a job than
studying
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study
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 in a college. The reason
of
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for
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this
 kind of decision is, if you try to get
qualification
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the qualification
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 of
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a raicer
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raicer
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raiser
 it will
as
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 easy as shooting fish in a barrel. After seeing your driving skills, the coach of races
which
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apply
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I know just
falls
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fell
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 in love with your driving skills.He told me
what
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 you were a diamond in the rough. Hopefully, you will find my suggestion accurate for you. I look forward to hearing from you within a week. See you soon. Best wishes. John Smith
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coherence cohesion
Introduce more paragraphs for each point to avoid running multiple ideas together.
coherence cohesion
Work on the flow of ideas; ensure each paragraph builds on the previous one more smoothly.
task achievement
The letter has a friendly and personal tone, suitable for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriate and friendly.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Real-world experience
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • On-the-job training
  • Student loan debt
  • Personal growth
  • Professional networking
  • Career development
  • Skilled workers
  • Job market
  • Career goals
  • Immediate income
  • Professional relationships
  • Market demand
  • Defining interests
  • Educational investments
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