Many feel that the common educational system of teachers and students in a classroom will be replaced by the year 2050

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rapid rise in technology
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changes in nearly every level of
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topic of why teachers and students
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should not be replaced by the year 2050. Several people have voiced their opinion on the practicality of studying in the school classroom, with
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one being the
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development
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, specifically designed for holding
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.
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regarding the necessity of learners themselves being presented at school.
On the other hand
, I would personally veto against
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ideas at the moment, for it is difficult to
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the pace of technological advancement in the future. The reason
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it is true that the distribution of
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material can be quickly and efficiently provided for students, the
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, at the present time, still has its many flaws.
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to at least have
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or a computer, and a stable internet connection to fully participate in class,
such
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pandemic, my school switched to teaching online, I often found myself disconnected from my friends, and teachers who
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us
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, I believe that we could not fully
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ourselves to that change,
however
, if one day an opportunities occur in which we are able to implement
such
changes to our education
system
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, and apply
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advances rationally.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • artificial intelligence (AI)
  • machine learning
  • online learning platforms
  • virtual reality (VR)
  • personalized AI tutors
  • tailored educational experiences
  • human interaction
  • mentor
  • inspire
  • psychological needs
  • group discussions
  • teamwork
  • social aspects of learning
  • critical life skills
  • digital-only format
  • hybrid model
  • educational accessibility
  • personalization
  • facilitating learning
  • curiosity
  • innovation
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