The graph gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
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a participant
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Film club, martial art ,Remove the comma
apply
amateour
dramatics , table tennis and musical performances.
Generally speaking, we can see the sudden growth in table tennis activity to 55 per Correct your spelling
amateur
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in year
2020. Change the article
the year
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, it clear
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the start of Change preposition
from
year
200 to 2005 . Correct article usage
the year
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, the number of people who contributer
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to
film
club was a hint of stabilized during the period.Correct article usage
the film
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followed by martial art reached a rise in 2010 with number
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the year
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from
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2000 to the half of 2005 .Change the article
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