The graph gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

The graph gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
The line chart provides information concerning the figure of
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being
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for
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different activities in Melbourne
such
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,
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Film club, martial art ,
amateour
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amateur
dramatics , table tennis and musical performances. Generally speaking, we can see the sudden growth in table tennis activity to 55 per
year
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2020.
Also
, it
clear
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to say that amateur dramatics was very popular
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the start of
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200 to 2005 .
However
,over the following years reached
the
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low of 10
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.
Additionally
, the number of people who
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contribute
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film
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the film
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club was a hint of stabilized during the period.
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followed by martial art reached a rise in 2010 with
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of 40 as we can see that it reached the same limit
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amateur dramatics in
year
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2015.
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, musical performances
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unknown
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year
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2000 to the half of 2005 .
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