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topic - In many countries more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?

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There are several nations
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that show
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 that most of their citizens consume huge
amount
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amounts
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 of imported
food
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 from abroad rather than locally produced
food
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.
This
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 is happening because of the quality of the
food
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.
While
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 there are some measures that can be implemented on buying
local
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locally
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 grown
food
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. On the one hand,
people
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 prefer buying international
food
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 because of
it's
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its
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 high-end quality. It is obvious for individuals to take
well processed
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well-processed
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food
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 to avoid health issues like; diarrhoea ,
food
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 poisoning and so on. Apart from that, international
food
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 suppliers not only maintain their hygiene but
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 warp
food
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 nicely to keep them safe from dust,
flies
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and flies
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 and to look fresh
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 clean.
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, there are a number of varieties
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food
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of food
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 which are highly rich
with
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in
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 nutrients. Maybe these are very easy to cook. So,
these kind
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this kind
these kinds
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 of
food
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 helps
people
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on
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with
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 their diet and gives different types of taste from daily boring meals.
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, In Vietnam, the shop owners collect
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 from different countries
as
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apply
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, apples ,
grapes
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and grapes
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 from America and melon from Japan. These
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food
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foods
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have
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are
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 displayed
by
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apply
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very well
protectedly
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protected
.
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,
people
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 spend a significant amount
money
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of money
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 on rarely available foreign
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for meeting
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to meet
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 up their appeal.
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, it is possible to regain popularity among local
food
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.
Firstly
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, farmers should reduce applying
eronmous
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enormous
amount
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amounts
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 of pesticides in agricultural fields .
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, there will be a reduction of health problems as some
of
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apply
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over used
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overused
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 fertilizers lead to cancer .
Government
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The government
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 should impose strict regulations regarding packaging,
hygienic
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and hygienic
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 maintenance. Another attempt could be marketing and arranging campaigns to encourage
about
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apply
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their product quality.
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Also
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Also,
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 that will lead to
spend
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spending
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 money on
local
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locally
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 grown products
as well as
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will
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improve
national
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the national
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 economy .
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, the air pollution will decrease because of less transportation called-
Food
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mile
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. In conclusion,
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imported
food
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 has already reached on top position by providing
qualityful
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quality
product
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products
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. So to mitigate
this
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comsuming
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consuming
 local
people
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 and government should work together continuously. There is no alternative without working on
this
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 fact.
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