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You paid for a one month English Language course at a college overseas but you cannot attend. Write a letter to the college administrator. In your letter Introduce yourself and give details of the course. Explain why you are unable to attend the course. Say what you would like to do

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Good afternoon, dear sir/madam. My name is Anastassia, I'm from Israel, and I have enrolled in the "English as a Second Language"
course
 at your college, which is scheduled to start on May 1. First of all, I believe, it would be a great
course
. I have heard a lot of positive feedback about your short courses.
Moreover
, some of my friends participated in your courses, and it was helpful for their careers. Unfortunately, I have some problems with my health, and I will have surgery two days before the
course
 starts.
Furthermore
, I tried to move my surgery, but it was impossible. I don't want to reject it, so I am interested in starting the next
course
 you will open. I hope it's possible.
Otherwise
, I want to get my money back. Thank you very much, best regards. Sincerely yours, Anastassia.
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task achievement
While introducing yourself, you could mention your registration number or any other unique identifier to help the administrator locate your details quickly.
coherence cohesion
Consider dividing the paragraph explaining why you cannot attend the course into two separate paragraphs: one explaining the health issue and another detailing the impossibility of rescheduling the surgery.
task achievement
The tone is polite and appropriate for a formal letter, which is essential for maintaining professionalism.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear introduction, body, and closing, making it easy to follow and understand.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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