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■The chart below give information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. ■Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

■The chart below give information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. ■Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The provided bar chart indicates data about how much
money
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 was given to
charity
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 by English
people
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in
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 various ages over a twenty-year period. A glance at the graph reveals that the highest
percentage
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 of
money
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 donated to
charity
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 was for adult
people
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 in 1990.
However
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,British young
people
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 did not prefer to spend their
money
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 on
charity
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 in 2010 with the lowest expenditure on
charity
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. In 1990,the number of
people
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 who tended to
pay
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money
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 on
charity
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 was nearly %43 with ages between 36 to 50 (which was the highest
percentage
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 of expenditure on
charity
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 over the period),compared to the
percentage
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 of
money
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 expenditure on
charity
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 in 2010 at %35.
Moreover
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,donating
money
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on
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to
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charity
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 for
people
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 who were from 51 to 65 years old in 1990 was a bit as popular as the number of
people
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in
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of
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this
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 age in 2010 at %35 and %38,respectively.
In contrast
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,the
percentage
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 of
people
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 who were into
spend
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spending
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 their
money
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 on
charity
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in
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apply
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ages 18 to 25
year
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years
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 old in 1990 was considerably more than juveniles in 2010 at approximately %16 and %7 (which was the lowest
percentage
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 of spending
money
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 on
charity
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 over the whole year),respectively.
In addition
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,the number of
people
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 who were over 65 years old and attended
to
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apply
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charity
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 was just over a third (%35) in 2010,just ahead of the
percentage
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 of
people
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 who
spend
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spent
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 their
money
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 on
charity
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 in 1990 at roughly %32.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, charity, people, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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