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The chart below shows tea and coffee consumption in 2015 Write a summary of the information. Select and reportthe main features, and make comparisons where necessary.

The chart below shows tea and coffee consumption in 2015 Write a summary of the information. Select and reportthe main features, and make comparisons where necessary.
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The given bar chart provides information on
drinking
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the drinking
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 habits of residents of 7 countries in 2015.
Overall
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,
the
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apply
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coffee
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 consumption was
distant
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a distant
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 first choice for countries like
United
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the United
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 States, Australia, Canada, and New
Zeeland
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Zealand
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, outstriping
the
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apply
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tea
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 consumption, with Russia and Turkey demonstrating the opposite trend. Having the most figures for consumed
kilograms
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 of
coffee
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 per person,
United
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the United
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 States and Canada surpassed every country, with
index
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indexes
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 of around 5.5 and 6.2 respectively.
Although
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 consuming less
coffee
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,
this
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 beverage still exceeded the
tea
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 consumption in
following
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the following
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 countries as Australia and New
Zeeland
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Zealand
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, having
number of
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apply
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3 and 3.8
kilograms
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 of
coffee
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 per resident against 1 and 1.2
kilograms
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 of
tea
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accordingly
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.
Conversely
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, Turkey and Russia
were
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apply
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accounted for
tea
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 preference over
coffee
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, with around 5 and 2.5
kilograms
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 drunk per dwelling. United Kingdom,
in
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on
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 the
order
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other
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 hand, had equal amounts of both beverages consumed, having 3
kilograms
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 per person for both
coffee
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 and
tea
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, kilograms with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • region
  • trend
  • comparison
  • pattern
  • cultural factors
  • availability
  • price
  • anomalies
  • unexpected
  • preferences
  • Western countries
  • Asian countries
  • report
  • main features
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