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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015.

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of social networking
sites
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 visited by internet
users
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 in Canada in 2014 and 2015.
Overall
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, there was a noticeable trend towards the use of multiple social networking
sites
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 over
this
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 period. In 2014, the majority of internet
users
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 (36%) preferred to visit only one social networking site.
However
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,
this
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 proportion saw a significant decrease to 28% in 2015, indicating a shift towards the use of multiple
sites
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. Meanwhile, the proportion of
users
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 who did not engage with any social networking
sites
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 was slightly above one-fifth in both years, decreasing marginally from 22% in 2014 to 21% in 2015. The preference for using two
sites
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 remained relatively stable, increasing only slightly from 23% in 2014 to 24% in 2015. Notably, there was a significant rise in the number of
users
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 who reported visiting four
sites
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, with
this
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 figure nearly doubling from 6% in 2014 to 11% in 2015. In summary,
while
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 using a single site was the most common practice in 2014, the data indicates a clear shift towards using multiple social networking
sites
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 by 2015, reflecting a growing engagement with social media platforms.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sites, users with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart overview
  • social networking sites
  • trends
  • adoption
  • comparison
  • significant changes
  • segment
  • growth or reduction
  • social media habits
  • patterns
  • multi-platform usage
  • decline
  • non-users
  • conclusion
  • digital communication
  • social media marketing
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