The following diagram shows the process of cloning a sheep. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The following diagram shows the process of cloning a sheep.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
This
diagram illustrates a
process
of how a
sheep
is cloned There are 2 different steps of extracting genes for
same gender
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sheep
before that one step
which
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apply
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genes are amalgamated and put into
uterus
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the uterus
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of a foster mother. The
process
of extracting genes from female
Sheep
A begins with taking body
cell
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cells
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from it.
Finally
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Finally,
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its DNA is extracted which is from taken body
cell
and the DNA will be waiting for
steps
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the steps
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of
Sheep
B to be done.
At the first stage
in the
process
of taking the nucleus from
Sheep
B , its Egs
cell
is taken and
then
,
finally
, the Nucleus is removed.After all of these steps,everything is done to start
a
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the
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process
of cloning.
Firstly
, the DNA from
Sheep
A fused with
egg
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the egg
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cell
from
Sheep
B.
Secondly
, the fused
cell
develops into an embryo which is placed in the
utreus
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uterus
of
Sheep
C.
Finally
, the Lamb is born as a clone of
Sheep
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