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Band 7.5

You have recently landed in a foreign country on a work visa and are interested in seeking information and guidance about the various places in and around the city. Write a letter to the relocation assistance provider seeing help. In your letter: •explain why you are writing the letter. •what kind of information you want. •how and when you can get requested information.

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Good afternoon, dear sir/madam. First of all, I wanted to introduce myself. My name is Anastassia, I moved to your wonderful country less than a fortnight ago with an open work permit. I'
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 letter with the purpose of receiving some kind of information about the structure of Canadian laws, health care, etc. I don't have any friends or relatives here, so I desperately need some support. I get your email from the immigration officer in the board office. So, I hope you'll have an opportunity to help me.
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, I can note what kind of information I would like to receive. I have some medical benefits from my company, and I'
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 trying to understand what it means - provincial health program, how to connect to
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 program, and,
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, if I really need it.
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 interested in - is how can I rent an apartment or condo for a long period. I don't have either Canadian experience or friends here to get a recommendation letter. I have the work contract for the next year,
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, I have the possibility to pay several months ahead. Now I'
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 renting
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 flat, and it's very expensive for me. I'll be very glad to get some help. Sincerely yours. Anastassia.

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task achievement
You provided a clear reason for writing the letter and covered the requested information comprehensively. To improve further, you could provide more specific questions or examples related to the Canadian laws and health care system.
coherence and cohesion
While the letter is well-organized overall, using separate paragraphs for each main point would enhance clarity. For example, one paragraph for the introduction, another for healthcare inquiries, and a third for housing inquiries. This structure would make it easier for the reader to follow.
greeting and closing
Your greeting and closing are polite and appropriately formal, which is suitable for this type of letter.
complete response
You clearly addressed why you are writing the letter, what information you need, and how you are seeking assistance. This demonstrates a thorough understanding of the task requirements.
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