IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
#information #tourists #holiday #resort #australia #features #comparisons
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The graph given illustrates data on
tourists
Use synonyms
 at a particular holiday resort in Australia. The graph relates to recent years.
Overall
Linking Words
, the
number
Use synonyms
 of
cases
Use synonyms
 in the US was more than the case of the figures in Asia.
According to
Linking Words
 the graph, it is noticeable that there is a development.
To begin
Linking Words
, first of all, it can be clearly seen that about
tourists
Use synonyms
 at a particular holiday resort in Australia. The initial one to consider is that there was a significant rise to 35% in the US.
Moreover
Linking Words
, the
number
Use synonyms
 of
cases
Use synonyms
 dropped significantly approximately 10% in Asia.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, the
number
Use synonyms
 of
cases
Use synonyms
 increased slightly to 16 days in American
tourists
Use synonyms
 in recent years
Therefore
Linking Words
, there was a significant fall to 7 days in Asian
tourists
Use synonyms
. Regarding the given data, it is remarkable that there is a leap. The figures for
cases
Use synonyms
 in Asia were less than the
number
Use synonyms
 of
cases
Use synonyms
 in the US. In reference to the represented figures, it is significant that there is an achievement.
Submitted by shaikhaalrashidi24 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, number, cases with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 4 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: