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you would like to invite a foreign friend to visit you for your birthday write a letter inviting your friend in your letter tell your friend about your birthday explain how much the visit would mean to you suggest that your friend stays at your house for the visit

#friend #visit #birthday #house
Dear Jone, Hope you're doing in good health and best spirit. I am writing
this
 to you for the invitation
of
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to
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 my birthday party which is on
september
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September
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 2nd. I know It's been
long
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a long
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time
we
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since we
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havn't
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haven't
 catch-up together. Now we got the chance to
do
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have
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 a reunion on
this
 occasion as all are the other friends
also
 invited. Since we graduated, we
havn't
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haven't
hadn't
 planned anything and it's been 4 years now. I want you to join
this
 party because I am
also
 going to introduce my fiancee on
this
 special day. Did you meet her?
This
time
, I planned some exciting activities for all of us and I hope we will feel nostalgia
after
this
meet up
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.
Also
, there are a couple of places that I chose to visit with you and
family
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your family
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, so It will be a great
time
 for sure. Don't worry about any
accomodation
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accommodation
 and hotel bookings, as we decided before, whenever you visit my town, you will stay at my house and
also
 can enjoy delicious food
of
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from
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 my mother's hands. Whenever you get a moment, send me all the details of your flight, so that I can pick you up on
time
. Looking forward to
see
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 you soon! Yours lovingly, Rajdeep
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task achievement
Try to proofread your letter before sending to catch minor grammatical errors such as 'I am writing this to you for the invitation of my birthday party' which should be 'I am writing to invite you to my birthday party'.
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Additionally, use contractions like 'it's' instead of 'It is'. For example, 'I know it has been a long time...' instead of 'I know It's been long time...'
coherence cohesion
Lastly, ensure that proper punctuation is used to make sentences clearer, such as 'Since we graduated, we haven't planned anything, and it's been four years now'.
task achievement
You provide a clear invitation and make it personal by mentioning the reunion aspect and other friends being invited.
suitable writing tone
The letter has an inviting and warm tone, making the friend feel welcome.
task achievement
You offer logistical support, like accommodation, effectively, making the letter practical and considerate.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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