The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population living in cities in four Asian countries from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given line graph depicts the data about the people who live in urban areas in the countries

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Philippines

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the Philippines

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, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia. The lines represent the

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percentages between 1970 and 2040 with possible anticipations. It can be seen that urbanization in

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each country notably increased and will continue

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this

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pattern. In

particularly

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population

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the population

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in the cities dramatically boosted in Malaysia as well in Indonesia,

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, in

Philippines

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the Philippines

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this

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indicator

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fluctuated

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. It is a fact that in the

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the number of urbanized people in Indonesia was the lowest (around 10%) in comparison with others. Despite

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, it significantly rose and

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became

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the second

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country where most of

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the residents

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(half of

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the total

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)

live

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in the city in 2020.

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contrast

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the former leader in

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criteria in 1970 demonstrated a fluctuation between 30% and 50% for all the time.

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, the highest percentage of

cityzens

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citizens

is predicted almost 90% in 2040.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.

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Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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157 words

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