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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population living in cities in four Asian countries from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population living in cities in four Asian countries from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph depicts the data about the people who live in urban areas in the countries
such
 as
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia. The lines represent the
in
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percentages between 1970 and 2040 with possible anticipations. It can be seen that urbanization in
the
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each country notably increased and will continue
following
this
 pattern. In
particularly
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,
population
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the population
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 in the cities dramatically boosted in Malaysia as well in Indonesia,
whereas
, in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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this
 indicator
flactuated
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fluctuated
fluctuates
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. It is a fact that in the
beginning
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 the number of urbanized people in Indonesia was the lowest (around 10%) in comparison with others. Despite
this
, it significantly rose and
was
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became
second
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 country where most of
residents
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the residents
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 (half of
total
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the total
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)
live
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lived
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 in the city in 2020.
In
contrast
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contrast,
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 the former leader in
this
 criteria in 1970 demonstrated a fluctuation between 30% and 50% for all the time.
In addition
, the highest percentage of
cityzens
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citizens
 is predicted almost 90% in 2040.
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