The graphs below show tourism visits to New Zealand in 2010 and projections till 2030, and the predicted breakdown of tourist spending in 2030

IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graphs below show tourism visits to New Zealand in 2010 and projections till 2030, and the predicted breakdown of tourist spending in 2030

These graphs illustrate

about

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apply

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the

number

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tourists

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who visit

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apply

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New Zealand and the projected

propotion

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proportion

promotion

of tourist spending in 2030.

Overall

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, the

number

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tourists

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visiting

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apply

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New Zealand

have been

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has

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grown

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apply

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since 2010 and it is

also

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predicted to

keeping in

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keep

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the

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increasing trend in 2030.

Tourists

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are

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projected to spend almost half of their money on

traveling

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travelling

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and

enterainment

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entertainment

. Entertainment will take the biggest portion of the total expenditure in 2030. In 2010, the

number

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tourists

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who

are

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were

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visiting New Zealand was about 100. But it has been keep inclining and in 2020, the

number

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hits 150. The growth of the

number

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tourist

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tourists

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is predicted to sustaining and the

number

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of them

twill

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will

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achieve 250 in 2030. In 2030, it is predicted that

tourists

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will spend their money the most on entertainment. At the same time,

accomodations

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accommodation

will

also

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take

big

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a big

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amount of total spending. They will take a quarter of

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the toal

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toal

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total

which is

secondly

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high price

following

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the following

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entertainment.

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Aug 16, 2024

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, tourists with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

166 words

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