You visit a sports centre regularly, and there is a problem with the changing rooms in it. You have complained about it several times but with no success. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre. In your letter, describe what the problem with the changing rooms is say what happened the last time you complained explain what you want the manager to do
Dear manager,
I am writing
this
letter to express my disappointment regarding the changing rooms of a sports center
that I notice are not in Change the spelling
centre
a good conditions
.
I am Rohit Sharma your long-term visitor, from the opening of Correct the article-noun agreement
a good condition
good conditions
this
club and I find some issues first time with changing area. Firstly
, lockers are broken where usually visitors keep their belongings but these days it is not safe. Even, last
Sunday, somebody stolen
my friend's wallet, luckily nothing was in his purse. Add the auxiliary verb
stole
has stolen
Also
, due to
lack of security
these kinds of problems are happening. Add a comma
security,
As well
cleaning staff clean the area Rephrase
Also
one
a week and inadequate lighting Correct your spelling
once
creats
various issues.
Correct your spelling
creates
create
Last
end
of the month, I complained to Correct article usage
the end
supervisor
, John but he just wrote all the troubles on the complaint form and ignored it. Correct pronoun usage
my supervisor
Then
felt very bad because it is public
place where people spend money to enjoy their time if it is not clean and good to use Add an article
a public
then
who will join this
next time.
So, I Change the punctuation
?
decide
to reach you.
Could you hire new people for cleaning who will take care Change the form of the verb
decided
all
Change preposition
of all
area
daily and call Correct article usage
the area
to
an electrician Change preposition
apply
for fixing
Change preposition
to fix
new
lightsCorrect article usage
the new
.
Change the punctuation
?
Moreover
, install a
latest security system and enhance the security guards in front of the entrance which will check the incoming person with their proof of identification.
I hope for a prompt response from your side regarding Change the article
the
this
persistent issue.
Yours sincerely,
Rohit SharmaSubmitted by harmandeep51075 on
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task achievement
Try to proofread your letter to catch minor errors, such as grammar issues and typos. This will help improve the quality and readability.
coherence cohesion
Consider using more transitional phrases to connect your ideas, which will help your letter flow more smoothly.
task achievement
Make sure to complete the sentences and ensure clarity in each point to avoid any misunderstandings.
task achievement
You have provided a comprehensive response to the prompt, covering all the necessary points: the problem, what happened last time, and what you expect the manager to do.
coherence cohesion
Your letter starts with a clear greeting and ends with a polite closing, maintaining a professional tone throughout.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph focuses on a specific point, making it easier to follow your reasoning and understand the issues you are raising.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite