The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie diagrams
depicts
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the expenditure of gas and/or
electricty
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electricity
and the greenhouse gas
emissions
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resulting from
this
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usage in an average Australian domestic consumer.
Overall
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, the major share of the energy consumption is from heating the rooms,which is next to the
water
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heating.
On the other hand
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,
emissions
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that
results
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from
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usage, which are environmentally deleterious,
demonstrates
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that
water
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heating is held responsible for the most
emissions
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and surprisingly,other appliances
emits
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next to
water
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heating.
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with,
The
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household warmers
consumes
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nearly half of the total energy expenditure of an average Australian house, where it is 42%. In the next place,
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water
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the water
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heater is used more, which is about one-third of the whole, ie 32%. The cooling system takes up the lowest of the energy consumption, which
constitute
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only 2%. The lighting uses double of
this
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, which is about 4%. Other appliances contribute 15% and
the
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refrigeration is responsible for around half of
this
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, which is 7%. Contrastingly, the other appliances
emits
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approximately a quarter of the whole share of
emissions
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, which comes
28
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%, but
water
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heating tops the contribution to
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by a proportion of 32%.
The refrigeration
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Refrigeration
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and
the
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heating
emits
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emit
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almost equal
per cent
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percentages
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of
the
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apply
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greenhouse gas
emission
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emissions
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, 14% and 15% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average Australian household
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Energy consumption
  • Activities
  • Heating
  • Cooling
  • Water heating
  • Appliances
  • Lighting
  • Standby
  • Percentage (%)
  • Consumption patterns
  • Efficiency
  • Emissions impact
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy-saving measures
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Electricity
  • Natural gas
  • Emissions breakdown
  • Energy audit
  • Environmental impact
  • Conservation
  • Mitigation strategies
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