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The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The graph illustrates the
percentage
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 of seven
regions
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; North
America
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, Latin
America
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 and
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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,
Europe
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, Africa,
China
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, India, Rish Asia-Pacific, and other Asia-Pacific as to how the
population
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 and
wealth
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share
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 in
percentage
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.
Overall
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, North
America
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 got the highest number in terms of
wealth
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share
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 among all seven
regions
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. In terms of
population
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share
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,
China
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 dominated the
overall
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percentage
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.
The
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apply
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North
America
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got
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has
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 the greatest record of
wealth
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share
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 globally with nearly 35%. Next
in-line
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in line
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 as to highest
in
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apply
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wealth
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share
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 is
Europe
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 with 30%
percentage
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. After
Europe
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, Rish Asia-Pacific comes next with close to 25%
wealth
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share
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.
While
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 some
part
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parts
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 of the continent got the biggest
percentage
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 in
wealth
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share
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, there are
regions
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who
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that
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 are significantly at the bottom place.
Regions
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 with
least
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the least
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 number in
wealth
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share
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 are
China
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, Africa, India, Latin
America
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 and
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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, and other
Asia- Pacific
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Asia-Pacific
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region
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regions
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 with only 0 to 5%.
On the other hand
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,
China
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 got the biggest
percentage
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 in terms of
population
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share
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 with close to 25% in total. It was succeeded by other Asian Pacific
region
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regions
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 with
near to
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nearly
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 20% recorded
population
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share
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.
While
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 India and
Europe
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ranges
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range
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 around 15%
on
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in
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population
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share
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. Other parts of the globe mostly got 0 to 10% of
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population
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the population
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share
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 like North
America
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, Latin
America
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 and
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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, Africa, and
Rich
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the Rich
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 Asian Pacific.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, regions, america, europe, china, population, wealth, share with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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