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The map below shows the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The map below shows the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
#centre #town #islip #plans #development
The program of geothermal power
plant
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plants
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 will
shows
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show
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 how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.
Firstly
,cold
water
 will be pumped down into the injection well, and
then
 it will go through the geothermal zone to reach the production well.Cold
water
 has changed into hot
water
 already.
The next step is
 to pump up the hot
water
 into the condenser which becomes steam in
this
 place.
steam
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 can provide power
to
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for
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turbine
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the turbine
a turbine
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 to work.
Finally
,
generator
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the generator
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 is powered by
turbine
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the turbine
a turbine
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 and produces electricity.
The
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Water
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water
replace
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replaces
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the
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apply
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energy which cannot
renewable
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be renewable
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 to provide electricity for production and living.It is a good way to save energy and protect
environment
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the environment
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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