You are interested in studying a short course at a college in an English speaking country. Write a letter to the college. In your letter you should say: which course you are interested in and why? describe your educational background and work experience? and say why you would like to study at that college.?

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Dear Sir, I am writing

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letter with context to enrollment in the Basic Jawa Language Computer course offered by the institute. I am a working professional, currently working as a junior analyst at Apex Technologies in Mumbai, India. I am keen to learn different possible applications of the

jawa

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java

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apply

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while

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designing a computer program. I finished my Bachelor's degree in 2012 and I did my internship with Tata Technology. Later, I was employed in

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firm and I worked there for five years before joining my current employer. I would like to join

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course at your institute

beacuse

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because

my present manager

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to be a student at your

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and he insisted

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apply

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join the program at your campus. Despite

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I have read many articles in business magazines

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many good things about the staff and professional approach in course work at your institute.

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, I would like to be a part of

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prestigious college. I am looking forward to hearing from you . Yours faithfully, Jatinder.

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task achievement

Provide more detailed information about why you are interested in the course, specifically what aspects of Java, not 'jawa,' you find appealing.

coherence and cohesion

Make sure to proofread your letter to correct small typographical errors, such as 'jawa' which should be 'Java,' and 'beacuse' which should be 'because.'

coherence and cohesion

Break down the last paragraph into smaller sentences for better readability. This helps with the logical structure and flow of the letter.

suitable writing tone

The tone of the letter is polite and appropriate for the context.

greeting and closing

The greeting and closing were appropriately used, setting a formal tone.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

173 words

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