You are interested in studying a short course at a college in an English speaking country. Write a letter to the college. In your letter you should say: which course you are interested in and why? describe your educational background and work experience? and say why you would like to study at that college.?

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
letter with context to enrollment in the Basic Jawa Language Computer course offered by the institute. I am a working professional, currently working as a junior analyst at Apex Technologies in Mumbai, India. I am keen to learn different possible applications of the
jawa
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java
Jawa
language
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while
designing a computer program. I finished my Bachelor's degree in 2012 and I did my internship with Tata Technology. Later, I was employed in
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firm and I worked there for five years before joining my current employer. I would like to join
this
course at your institute
beacuse
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because
my present manager
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to be a student at your
alma-mater
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and he insisted
me
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to
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join the program at your campus. Despite
that
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I have read many articles in business magazines
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many good things about the staff and professional approach in course work at your institute.
Therefore
, I would like to be a part of
this
prestigious college. I am looking forward to hearing from you . Yours faithfully, Jatinder.
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task achievement
Provide more detailed information about why you are interested in the course, specifically what aspects of Java, not 'jawa,' you find appealing.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread your letter to correct small typographical errors, such as 'jawa' which should be 'Java,' and 'beacuse' which should be 'because.'
coherence and cohesion
Break down the last paragraph into smaller sentences for better readability. This helps with the logical structure and flow of the letter.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is polite and appropriate for the context.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing were appropriately used, setting a formal tone.

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